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Òåìà: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 06.03.2010 14:11 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.  
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Ìîè ìûñëè çàðåçàíû áûëè, Ïîä âîäàïàäîì õîëîäíûõ êëèíêîâ, Ìîè ãðåçû ðàçâåÿíû òîæå, Çâîíîì æåëåçíûõ öåïåé è îêîâ, Îêàçàëèñü íå êðûëüÿ, à êàìíè, ×òî íà çåìëå ïðîëåæàò ñîòíþ ëåò, È ðàçâåÿíû ñòàðûå çàìêè, Îòðàæåíèåì ñîáñòâåííûõ ðóê, ãäå ñâåò? Äàé ìíå îòâåò, ïîùàäè, íå ñïåøè, Ãäå îí? Ïðèþò äëÿ òåíåé, êóäà ìíå âîéòè, Ïðîñòè, ß íå óñïåë, âåäü ïðîêëÿòîìó íå íàéòè, Ñâåò... È íåòëåííûå òåíè áîãîâ, Ðàçáðîñàëè ïî ìèðó çàïóòàííûõ ñëîâ, Ïàóòèíó äîðîãàìè âûñòëàëè â àä, ß ñ âîïðîñàìè ì÷óñü ê ñàòàíå è ÿ ðàä, Äàé ìíå îòâåò, ïîùàäè, íå ñïåøè, Ãäå îí? Ïðèþò äëÿ òåíåé, êóäà ìíå âîéòè, Ïðîñòè, ß íå óñïåë, âåäü ïðîêëÿòîìó íå íàéòè, Ñâåò... |
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 06.03.2010 18:56 |
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Í. Íîâãîðîä
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Åñëè ýòî íå ðÿäîâîå ñòèõîòâîðåíèå, íî òåêñò äëÿ ðîê-êîìïîçèöèè - âïîëíå ïîéä¸ò! Íàñòðîåíèå ïåðåäàíî, íåñêîëüêî ìðà÷íîâàòî-ãîòèøíî, íî... ýòî âñ¸ óìûøëåííî, êàê ÿ ïîíèìàþ. ìèõî |
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Íàäî ñòàðàòüñÿ äåëàòü õîðîøî: ó¸âî - îíî è ñàìî ïîëó÷èòñÿ!
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 06.03.2010 23:11 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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Ùèíåíêîâ ïîÿñíè, ÷òî çíà÷èò óìûøëåííî?  î÷åíü èíòåðåñíî
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 14:49 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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shinenkov , òû ñî ìíîé íå ðàçãîâàðèâàåøü?) | |
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 15:17 |
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ïëàòôîðìà Ïëàíåðíàÿ
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íåò, îí òåáÿ íå èãíîðèðóåò. ïðîñòî îí ùàñ ïüåò. ïðàçäíèê ñåäíÿ 
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http://www.stihi.ru/avtor/gumgurush Ýòà áîëü, ýòîò êàéô, äàæå ýòî ãoâío – èìåíóåòñÿ ñ ãîðäîñòüþ – «æèçíü»(c)
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 16:25 |
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óõóõóõ, ãäå òû, ÉîæûãÚ ñ áîëîò? 
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>shinenkov , òû ñî ìíîé íå ðàçãîâàðèâàåøü?) îí âèäàòü ëûêà íå âÿæåò)))) â äðàçàõ òðîèòñÿ è ïàëüöû çàïëåòàþòñÿ))) |
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 16:33 |
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óõóõóõ, ãäå òû, ÉîæûãÚ ñ áîëîò?
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>â äðàçàõ òðîèòñÿ â ãëàçàõ, áëèí... ÷åòî ÿ çàèêàòüñÿ ñòàë... |
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 16:46 |
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Í. Íîâãîðîä
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>, ÷òî çíà÷èò óìûøëåííî? î÷åíü èíòåðåñíî Óìûøëåííî, ýòî êîãäà íàðîøíà...  òåêñòå ó îäíîé äåâóøêè ñ ôîðóìà: ïàðåíü ïîäðóãó ðåæåò, ïîòîì çâîíèò åé ñ ìîáèëüíîãî äëÿ ÷åðåç òðè. ß ñïðàøèâàþ ó àâòîðà - îøèáêà? Èëè - îí çâîíèò â íàäåæäå, ÷òî îíà âûæèëà? Íåò, ãîâîðèò - êàê îíà âûæèâåò - îí åé êîíòðîëüíî ãîëîâó âîîáùå îòðåçàë, à çâîíèò íà òîò ñâåò - ïîáîëòàòü ïðîñòî íå ñ êåì... Íèêàêèõ îøèáîê: âñ¸ óìûøëåííî, ãîòèøíî, ðÎêîâî.. Çàðåçàííûå ìûñëè íàïîìíèëè òó çàðåçàííóþ äåâ÷îíêó. Òàì - ýòî îïðàâäûâàëîñü ðÎêîâûì íàïðàâëåíèåì, âîò ÿ è ñïðîñèë... À âîîáùå - îòìå÷àåì ïðàçäíèê Íå îòâå÷àë - ïðîñòî íå áûëî ìåíÿ èíîãäà |
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Íàäî ñòàðàòüñÿ äåëàòü õîðîøî: ó¸âî - îíî è ñàìî ïîëó÷èòñÿ!
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 16:51 |
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Í. Íîâãîðîä
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> shinenkov , òû ñî ìíîé íå ðàçãîâàðèâàåøü?) Ñ òî÷êè çðåíèÿ êëàññè÷åñêîé ïîýçèè òåêñò ðàññìàòðèâàòü è íå ïûòàëñÿ, êàê òåêñò äëÿ ðîê êîìïîçèöèè - ëèáî ïðèåìëåìî, ëèáî âîîáùå õîðîøî.  çàâèñèìîñòè îò ìóçûêè Óäà÷è ðîêó!! |
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Íàäî ñòàðàòüñÿ äåëàòü õîðîøî: ó¸âî - îíî è ñàìî ïîëó÷èòñÿ!
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Òåìà: Re: Ñâåò
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2010 20:11 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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Íó âèäèìî äà, òàê è ïîëó÷èëîñü ðÎêîâî) Äà ïðàçäíè÷åã îäíàêî) ß òîæ îòìå÷àë ñ 7ãî ïî 8å)) | |
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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